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终于,全年最后一场考试考了一个全年预测都在重点强调的题“老龄化”。这个社会相关的话题小有难度,不算常见。这一次,或多或少算是与各位考生如约而

至。至此,2016年的雅思考试完美收官。

原题如下:

Some people think that getting old is entirely bad, while others think that life of the elderly in modern world is much better than in the past. Discuss

both views and give your own opinion.

题干中,明显给出了两个需要考生论证的观点。其一,人变老了是极坏的事情。其二,现在社会的老年人的生活要比过去好很多。用discuss both view的方式来

提问,再合适不过了。

在此笔者需要强调如下几点:

首先,此类题目,需要考生尽可能平均讨论题干中的两个观点,尽量不要顾此失彼。其次,至于考生对这两个观点的看法,只要符合论证逻辑即可,考官并无预

设立场。再次,考生必须明确给出自己的观点。

纵观全文,笔者的观点就是“当你老了,头发白了,一切也都废了”。各位读者可以不赞同笔者的观点,只要认可其论证逻辑和行文框架即可。

Twilight years are what all people have to go through in their life, and without a shadow of doubt no one in the world is willing to enter the sunset of

his day but we all have no other choice. What is worse, people's later life is definitely not as beautiful as they expected and even could be more

miserable than ever before.

开头并没有太多的背景介绍,而是直截了当地点题,并且从侧面已经表达清晰了笔者阴暗的立场。


主段一

It seems that all related stakeholders of supporting the aged, such as some relevant social organizations, governments and family members, are all

working collectively in order to provide financially and healthily secure life for the old. They are doing so with the implication that the elderly are no

longer able to take care of themselves, and become encumbrances of families and societies but not contributing members. Psychologically, this is

the tragedy that everyone has to persuade himself to accept. Rejuvenation is certainly the wish that stays deep in every old person's heart. On top of

this, becoming old means being closer to death, which is the extremely cruel part of natural law.

针对题干中的观点一发表讨论。通过论证告诉大家,老了就一切都晚了,一切都完了。


主段二

Retirement life nowadays in people's mind who are getting old is like what they saw before. Old people used to live in nursing home financially

supported by governments, with enjoying high-end healthcare and being visited by their children and grandchildren regularly. The dreamed life like

this ends up as proportion of old population is tremendously high. This is to say, governments are not capable of investing adequate fund in

establishment of facilities for the old, meaning that a considerable proportion of old people might have no chance to live in the public nursing home.

Lucky ones living there probably can see their children infrequently for the reason that their children are always stuck in their work as most of people

do in modern society.

相比上一段显得更为阴暗。通过论证告诉大家,老年生活的美好都是大家对过往的认知。现在老龄化问题严重,社会资源不足,各位的晚年可能会惨的难以想

象。

To sum up, getting old is the most horrible thing that I can imagine so far, especially in recent years when aging population is becoming the most

serious social problem across the globe.

结尾段,再次申明变老是笔者可以想象的最恐怖的事情了,尤其是在这个老龄化极其严重的年代。

 

总而言之,笔者相信不会有几个读者会认同笔者的观点。这并不重要,值得各位参考的是行文的逻辑,论证的手法和词句的用法。此文成于雾霾锁城之时心烦意

乱之际。观点消极阴暗,不足一论。望各位海涵,待各位斧正。

 

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